Writing descriptions of oral sex using your senses. (F/M. M/F, F/F or M/M welcomed.)

I hope this thread does not make me look like a Coo Coo bird with too much time on my hands.

I have dabbled with writing for several years. No, I have not had anything published yet, other than on couple of sites with only a couple of paychecks. I have had several publishers offer advice and criticism.

I thought it would be fun to hear how the members here would include their senses into descriptions of oral sex. Obviously, sight is easy with conceptions like his ranging erection with the veins protracting as if they were angry. Sound is also easy, as he moaned a long, muffled sound of relief and contentment during his climax. Touch is also relatively easy; his member, although hard, was also soft, smooth to my lips. After a few movements of my mouth, I could feel the wetness of my actions. Now for the hard natural senses to describe. Yes, there is a natural sense; it is a sweet smell, but not overly sweet as to be dispersible. I do not like how I could smell the sweetness of his sweat. Finally, what about taste? I have always felt my husband’s member tasted like peanut butter, but if I put that in a novel, my readers would laugh me out of the building. Does anyone have any descriptions of the male or female organ in regard to taste?

I am interested in hearing your suggestions.

Musk or musky is always a go-to for scent. Tang is a good word. "Male scent". For taste the slight saltiness from sweat on skin or the slight saltiness of his pre-cum. I always found it a bit nutty but that's so cliche - nutty flavor from his nuts - or that may be overthinking.

@Nurse_Phillips Thank you, I love tang and also the slight taste of saltness.

I think your hubby has been using Jiff, or Skippy instead of Vaseline @ddell2 . 😃

@LordJim2 I am still laughing as I type. If he were going to use something other than a real lubricant, it would be Scotch!

Ok not to sound too weird. But I love the smell and taste of a man when he is somewhat taco scented. Don't know the exact spice I'm looking for, maybe cumin (pun not intended). It's not just on me either I've noticed it on a few men when I'm down there for business. To me it's a savory taste and in my experience most precum has a much lighter and sweeter taste than actual cum, some of which can be bitter in taste to me.

Guess it all depends on individual diets and hygiene. Still haven't found one I'd say no to though based on scent or taste

I write this stuff for money, and using the senses is vital in good erotic fiction. It's surprising how many writers limit it to sight and sound when there are more senses busy with the experience.

Similes I recall using for the taste of cock or pussy include boiled shrimp, bought on that long-ago vacation in Galveston or New Orleans; lobster or crab without butter, enjoyed on their honeymoon at Cape Cod; clam juice; and raw oysters. If you tie it to a food taste, you also get to round out the person's character by adding a past event. Scents include musk, seawater, fresh sweat, and whatever scents the person applies or uses, like cologne or scented soap.

Do be on the lookout for filtering, common when incorporating more of the senses--reporting what senses were used to convey information to the brain. It creates distance between the reader and the character, and it makes you use "I" or the character's name as the subject of the sentence instead of leading with the sensory input. Instead of "I feel the wetness," go with "My lips slip in the wetness" or something similar.

Filtering can usually be spotted by the words that do it, although not all uses of these words are filtering. Search for all the verb tenses and forms of saw, heard, tasted, smelled, felt, knew, thought, considered, regarded, wondered, noticed, was aware, sensed, etc. Decide on a case-by-case basis whether it's there to filter the point-of-view character's experience, and if it is, rewrite it to make the thing the character experiences the subject of the sentence.

@PinotNoir Thank you for your input. I've used scented soap before, as well as men's cologne. My husband uses really tasteful brands. In other words, your olfactory glands don't detect him before your eyes. I think that I can use seawater. Thank you again.

Taste will not sit still. It changes with the person, the hour and how long your mouth stays there, so it reads better as a shift than as a name.

For him, the first lick is almost nothing. Tongue drawn slow along the underside, warm skin, faint salt, quiet as the hollow of his throat. A lighter pass over the head and it changes. Cleaner. A thin sweetness that is not sugar, gathering where he is most sensitive. Once your mouth closes around him the heat is everywhere. He fills the tongue, the palate, the soft drag of your lips. Each time you sink and draw back you taste more of him, salt thickening, that sweetness sharpening. Near the end it turns. Alkaline. Bitter at the back of the tongue. A bright metal edge as he pulses, then only salt and the memory of him when you let him slip free.

For her, the first touch is lighter still. The tip of the tongue along the outer folds, heat, a trace of salt, her musk just beginning. A slower, flatter lick and she opens under it. Tang at first, then softer once she is wet, saline giving way to something denser that coats the tongue. When you seal your mouth over her and suck, the taste deepens. It is no longer a surface. It is her, slick against your lips, gathering, changing each time you lick up and linger. Near her cycle it carries iron. Otherwise it is tidewater after rain. Salt, then musk, then a cleaner note once she is close, left shining on your mouth when you lift your head.

What stays with the reader is the alteration. What it was under the first light lick, what it became once the mouth was full and what lingered on the tongue after.

Hmmm... a whole new side gig. Lessons in creative writing for sensual expression.

If there were sufficient interest, I could easily teach a class in it. Eons ago, I took a one-session class on writing steamy romance, and everything the instructor said I already knew. I think she was sort of soft-pedaling the sexuality of it, but here that would not be necessary.

I used to write erotic stories, but in Italian, sometimes to pass some boring times on board..it happened, yes.....I kind of stopped after my wife passed....

I don't know how good would I be in creating those images in English...Yes, writing about sensorial feelings can make you discover things you never thought about...smells have always been big on me, much more than taste, when talking about giving oral...what I disliked the most was the animalesque smell of healthy, excited, young men when their hormones showed off.. that smell attenuates with age and is usually non existent now, with mature guys..a smell that used to permeate even skin and clothes.... did not even care for my own that much...loved instead the female version of it, lot more subtle and less aggressive, but still penetrating, calling to me... touch is involved some, sight not at all as I mostly tend to close my eyes once my mouth and tongue start working...taste is usually overwhelmed by saliva, until the eventual jolt of orgasmic juices..but even at that time I still enjoy the smells, every person, of course, unique in taste and smell.... A game we used to play at special parties, was to recognize people using only smell and taste senses...very funny...the difficult part was when you were trying to recognize someone you never done it with...

@Clis

I used to write erotic stories, I don't know how good would I be in creating those images in English..

My mother was a language arts professor. She could literally master a language in a very short period. I don’t have her ear or her talent; I do know a few languages. I guess through osmosis. You are so right what is sensuous in one language is not in another. I would think that the hardest language to write erotica in would be German. The easiest would be French! Everything is more sensuous in French!

@Alexa1 You write vvery well. After I read you post I needed a cold shower.

The initial sweeps of tongue and lips over the labia awaken pheromone-driven lust. Elusive of description, the secretions elicit a furor of intensity to feed the rising sexual thirst. Plunging into the vagina, the questing tongue is shocked by the contrast of encountering the viscous, umami fluid flowing forth. Senses are overwhelmed. More!